Kobe Nabried Advanced Essay #2

The first quarter of English 2 for Copper stream was the beginning of an era for my learning experience. It marked the beginning of what would be a world-changing period of educational growth. In terms of outline, Copper stream wasn't far from any other 10th grade English class in the city. What made the experience so unique was the discussions we were able to have on the text that we all read as a class. Reflection on last year, specifically in that class, I've been able to come to the conclusion that group analysis and discussion is the best way to understand literature.

Since its original publishing in 1954, William Golding’s “The Lord of the Flies” has grown to be one of the most frequently challenged novels in recent history. This is due greatly to its allegorical references to society. I remember sitting and picking apart and analyzing the content of the book in E-band for almost the entirety of the first quarter. The fact that there was enough in the book to allow me to analyze it for a whole quarter and still find new things is what makes it so powerful. As we powered through the book, the students that were truly engaged in the class and its works were building up to a mass revelation. As we were preparing to begin the process of our benchmark, I was anticipating Kay assigning the class a prompt about human nature, due to the fact that it frequently appeared in the book and was often discussed in the class. That wasn’t the case, but it wasn't far off from what we actually ended up doing. We were given the task of forming a thesis statement and justifying our thesis throughout the course of our essays. Having only written essays based on specific prompts before, this style of writing was all new. Writing that essay caused me to reevaluate the manner in which I wrote analytical papers. I had never been given the task of forging a thesis that had to meet specific standards before. D.U.C.K stood for debatable, unique, creative, and knowledgeable. If our thesis statement failed to meet that criteria, we would only be granted approval when we submitted something that did. Within a week, the majority of the class had submitted their essays and were awaiting a grade. After he had read and graded the essays of the class, Mr. Kay commended Copper Stream, stating that the batch of essays that had been submitted might have been the best that he’d ever seen. I would like to think that we did the novel some justice. The goal of Lord of the Flies was to spark great debates and conversations, and that’s exactly what it did.

The thesis that I used for that essay was “People are often restrained by society. In the William Golding’s “Lord of the Flies,” the boys have been on the island for around two months when Jack begins to paint his face. When Jack begins to paint his face, it symbolizes his release from societal restraints.” I proved this thesis by using a series of quotes. The first quote and analysis was “When Jack first paints his face in chapter three he begins to break away from his societal restraints. When he wore the mask, Jack felt liberated from shame and self-consciousness.” What came with reading so far into the book was being able to see from the get-go that most often, it will contain some form of metaphorical symbolism, and not everything should be taken so plainly as a boy deciding to paint his face.

Literature isn't something that can be memorized and regurgitated onto a piece of paper so someone can say you understand it. Everyone has to come to their understanding of literature at their own pace and point. Nobody reads literature the same way, and nobody understands it the same way. Literature is a powerful thing, and I'm glad I got to experience it the way I did.

I found my pace, and eventually, my point, by being able to share my literary journey with a group of people embarking on the same journey. Through this, I found my own way. Discussions allowed me to see how everyone was comprehending it, therefore making me look at things in a multitude of different lights. Literature never only means one thing, so it shouldn't be taught like it is either.

2 Questions:

How many memories would you suggest that I use?

What would you suggest that I use for additional evidence?

Media Fluency Rivera #2


I learned that not everyone is going to have the same view as you and not everyone has the same preferences but that's okay because not everyone is the same. I also learned that I should take the things people are saying in a positive way not a negative way, I say this because you can learn from mistakes or you can get advance for the present or the future.

I switched the picture of me because there was a white border on the previous picture and it was out of place and drawing attention away from the rest of the slide. I also added a picture to cover more of the slide, and lastly I also rearranged the words and their placement.

Tech Project - me

Media Fluency-Lily Rivera

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From the critique of my slide, I was able to learn a little more about how people see billboards and what affects how they see them. I saw the things about my slide, as well as other's, that people thought were pleasant to the eye. I was able to see the things that people thought made a good sign/billboard. It was a very beneficial project, in my opinion at least, because the things we learned can also be applied to presentations in other classes.
To go about changing my slide, I took a lot of the critique that I got from the class, and applied it into the second version of my slide. I was able to darken my photo a little, by changing the gradient, and getting rid of the harsh line that separates the picture from the text. I also changed the spacing of my words on the side by putting them each in their own separate text box. By doing that, I was able to get almost-even spacing between each word. I saw how this did change how I viewed the slide, I personally think that even that small of a detail can make a rather large difference.  

Griffin Gallagher Advanced essay #2

In grade school I had a friend named nick. Teachers would always call him out because he was scared to read in front of the class. From the beginning his self confidence was low. He was very shy and didn't talk to many people, and if someone new tried talking to him he would take a long time to feel comfortable with them. Nick had a stuttering problem. Whenever he was in front of a large group of people his voice would lock up and he would shut down. His self confidence was destroyed in the 8th grade when a teacher made him stand up in front of the whole grade, all 225 of us. He was alone and he shut down completely botching his graduation speech. I talked to him afterwards and he said he had never felt so sick before in his life. His confidence was no longer existence, he shut eve the people who were closest to him out.

People with speech impediments and other problems with speaking and writing have severe problems with their self confidence. They feel as though they are not normal. But what is normal? Is there a direct definition that labels these impediments as not normal? Normal is defined as standard, usual, typical or expected. But how do we define normal? Society's normal is, if people are all the same they are normal. Any defining feature or change to their personal, or physical appearance warrants them to be “not normal.”  There is a story written by Mike Rose called “I just want to be average,” And that is a direct quote from the story that points out how people who are not seen as normal feel about their surroundings. People who are not “Average” or “Normal” can feel like somewhat of a group of outcasts. They are separated from the mainstream classes and put in their own “Vocational Track” which means d-level learning which does not help. In d level classes you are not treated as a human being, and you are certainly not respected by the people who are teaching you. This very easily make these students feel like they do not matter. This is why many of them act out or show off, in an attempt to get the attention that they so desperately need. If people took their time to sit down with these students and try to help them, they would not feel the need to act out and do bad things to get someone's attention.

My older cousin Nicky had a speech problem when he was younger. It was hard for him, he was teased and put in a special learning class. A teacher sat down with him one on one and walked him through how to cope with stuttering. He told me it was one of the hardest things he has ever done, but having a teacher to help him and calm him down when he got annoyed or angry with himself, helped push him through the problem. Today he is an officer in the United States Navy, and has no problem whatsoever with speech.

With proper learning strategies and help, people with speech problems and other disabilities can feel like they are part of this so called normal society.

Media Fluency- Darlenny Rodriguez

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I learned from critic of my slide that I don't always need to insert my name. Also, I should take into consideration my audience too. If they can't read my slide or the don't like it I need to change it because the goal is to make your slide appealing. The only thing I actually changed was cropping the water mark from the bottom right corner of my illustration. I also took my name out because the way my slide was set up, it had no purpose being there.

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I learned that a lot of effort goes into making something simple, and moving a word just a couple of centimeters would make a huge difference. I also learned that you cannot add shadows on google slides.
I kerned the word "Travel" by adding some small spaces between the letters to make the word bigger and easier to focus on. I moved the word farther away from the darker dots on the picture so that place wouldn't be unclear.

Media Slide Reflection Naima DeBrest

I think that I learned a lot from the critiques from the class. I saw things from a new perspective. I also saw how other people saw what I put out. I feel like this was a good experience because I had the chance to listen to other peoples opinion.

In my slide I got rid of the be happy at the bottem because it was unessesary. I also tried to fade away the blue lines on the sides.

Slide Reflection; lilly roman

Tech Me Magazine
I learned that although I had a good start, I still had some things to work on. One of them was that passion and art had not been capitalized, so I did so in this slide. I also had stretched the image and the fingers were cut off. I was not able to correct the missing fingers sadly, but I enlarged the image instead. Due to this change, the words did not have much room and I had to shove them to the side.


After the feedback from my peers, I changed a few things about my slide. One piece of feedback I got was that my font was a bit to small, so I made it bigger. The other piece of feedback I got was that my name was a little too close to the white blurry part on the top right of my slide so I slid it a bit to the left.

Media Fluency part 2. Sean Johnson

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I changed the font of the Letters and I added some shadows to make contrast in my newer version. I also made them all the same design to add repetition instead of a lot of different fonts and designs. I chose these words because they represent some essential parts of me and I can bring up many stories from each design and word that I inserted in the slide.

Media Fluency Reflection- Majd Bostani

I have learned a lot from the class critique of my slide. Not only did I learn the strong points and flaws of my original slide, but also a lot of feedback on how to make better slides at SLA and in life! Originally, my slide was built around the concept of of an IKEA billboard. It followed the colorful, powerful, yet simple design of it. However, the black background with the white and red letters was rather distracting. The picture's angle was angled way too far up. I intended for a 5 degree tilt, but it looked more like a 25 degree tilt.  

After the class critique, I took everything that my classmates and Ms. Hull said about my slide into account. I made the background light blue so that the white letters could pop out better, as well as symbolize the color of the sky! That turned out to be a big win on the term of contrast. I moved the letters according to the rule of thirds so that it would look neat and organized. I also changed the font and color of my letters. Originally, my quote was in a white cursive font as they are now. However, Leonardo da Vinci's name was written in red and in a Times New Roman font. I changed that so it could match with the quote and not be so distracting. Like I stated above, I reduced the tilt of the picture so it would maintain a 5 degree pitch better. Over all, I changed and learned a lot after the class critique.
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Media Slide reflection Hamidou

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I have learned a lot from my group and classmate the  critique was so help. The  critique they gave my classmate say that  I need to fix the font and the the word. They also said that i should make the word fit with the background.I change the font to gaming so you can see the picture as what i say.I also made the font large so it can show out.  

U1-#3. Reflection & Second Slide on SLATE Milligan

Media Fluency Me Magazine Slide

I decided to make some major changes to my slide. When critiquing my slide, many people told me that my image that I used was pixilated and a little to difficult to see. Looking back on my slide, I agreed with what they said. I also thought that my slide had too much blank space in a way that did not look appealing to the eye. I decided to just get rid of my image altogether and replace it with a new one. To keep my slide from looking too empty but still not cluttered, I decided to make an image my background. The image still pertained to my passion, which is reading. I changed the color of my words from red to white so that they would contrast better with the image as suggested by one of the sources we had. The source said to have a color palette that contrasts, which is why I had white words on top of a darker image. I stilled used kerning to fit the words “my passion” on top of the “read” section of the word “reading” in a way that is visually pleasing. I also slightly moved my words so that they did not touch at all, since that was one concerning to some viewers. The rule of thirds still applies because I  positioned my slide so that the image catches the viewer’s attention first.

Second Slide Reflection Eastwood

What I learned from the critique that my peers gave me is that I should make some of the pictures and the writing more center. So I put two pictures on each side and put the main one in the middle with Alyssa's Life above it and I put the emoji under it. I also added a bold red background so it wouldn't be plain. I made these changes because I wanted my slide to be more eye catching and i wanted it too look like I really did listen to my peers.
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Reflection & Second Slide-Coney

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From the critique I learned that I should not have a large box just to separate my slide into thirds. I also learned to attempt to make my text contrast with my image. I made my text line up with the stairs and match the color of my bowl of cereal. As result of this large box that i made the first time around, I enlarged it to fit the slide.

My new slide

My first slide was pretty good. I worked really hard on it and it expresses my love for basketball. I was truly interested in what my classmates said I needed to improve on. They inspired me to make those improvements. There were a few things I fixed instead of leaving out of my slide like my name, the jordan logo, and the LeBron James quote. Overall I changed a lot to make my new slide more appealing to my auidence.


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Reflection for Slide - DeRock

Me Magazine Slide (1)
​I learned that I need to make my slide simple, and make sure the audience can understand and read the things on my slide. The words on my slide were small and couldn't be read by the audience. There was a distracting blur in the corner of my picture. The big flaw with my presentation was the lack of knowledge. I didn't use any words from the websites that were provided.

When editing my slide, I wanted the words to pop out to the audience, so I highlighted the words in yellow because its a very bright color, that is easy to see. I took a screenshot for the part of my image that didn't consist of having that annoying blur that was in the corner. The picture bleeds a little bit as well. The words on my slide are easier to read now, and my slide stayed simple.

Final Slide Design

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1.) From the criticism I had received I had learned a lot more about what my slide should look like and how I was to present it. The first thing that I was told was that the color on the slide where far too bright and did not go well together. I had two colors as my background and I was told had it should only be one which is why I had changed that. Also my slide had multiple pictures on it and was all over the place and I had to stick with a single topic which is what I did. In my old slide I had many pictures that were all different colors which brings me to the last piece of criticism. I was told that it would be much simpler and neater to have one big picture that shows my topic quickly instead of having multiple ideas on the slide.

2.)The first change I had made was the color because before it was bright and slightly difficult to read so I had changed it to something darker so if I put white writing it would stand out more. I had gotten rid of all my pictures because I felt as if they didn't go with my main idea. My old slide did have a title but I saw that it was better to put large words that had meaning to them because it gave to the reader something to think about what kind of person I am.  

Media Fluency Part 2- Lor, Autumn

Pictures that covers the whole slide, makes it less eye catching. When it’s a big picture, it takes away the main focus. On my slide itself, I felt like it was a bad picture to put as a slide shows. So instead of making it a plain picture, I changed to texture of it.

I changed the color of the fonts and I also changed the positioning of the word “photography”. I kind of had made it follow along the line at the top of the building and then moved the words “me magazine” to a different area. The last thing I did was taking out my name.

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Tech Slide Changes-Benamara

What did you learn from the critique of your slide? 
I learned that I should have changed the way the text looked  because it was somewhat distracting to the eye because of the square shaped highlighted theme around the quote. The edges didn't match the round spoons in the background and covered half of the image and bright colors that bring out the meaning of the quote. Also, my name at the bottom was unnecessary, so I could just delete that. 

Why did you make the changes you made to the slide?
A change that I made was take away the white highlight behind the words because it is distracting to the background. Instead, I added a white surrounding  around the letters as like a shadow so they will still be able to see, yet not distracting for the rest of the slide. Also, I removed my name that was at the bottom because it wasn't important in the power point. 
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Edited Slide Reflection

After receiving criticism from my classmates I found that the size of the chocolate picture made it hard to make out, to fix this, I made it bigger. Also, the picture of the butterfly turned out pixelated because I had to widen it to fit the slide, so I made it longer to balance out the alterations. The title of my original slide was “ The Wonderful World of Waverly”, but after consulting with my peers I found that the inconsistency in words beginning with “W” caused a subconscious discomfort. In response I changed the title to “Waverly’s Wonderful World” to eliminate the unpleasant vibe. I’m happy with my edited slide and think that the little changes made it all the better. The next time I see a sign I will be able to appreciate all the planning, science, and critical thinking behind the advertisement.

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