Including the journals was also something that I enjoyed — although a part of me wished for more… not explanation, but insight into how your character got into writing poetry, and what was released in him by writing it. While I was glad the mother came back, in terms of the character, a part of me wanted that reunion to be a little more fraught. As it reads now, I feel like you've written two chapters, and in the third chapter things are going to get complicated with mom again. That, or we need more insight into her own change of heart, what drove her away (apart from the drinking) in the first place.
What is the name of this story? The first-person story was very fresh. I can see that you used many techniques from the authors. The dialogue you added sound real. Saying words with contractions. What I liked most was the journals. It was very eye-catching to me.
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