At first, I was as confused as the main character of the story. I think that's the most intriguing part of the plot; the readers are forced to learn about the world through the lens of the main character, with as little information as they know. The ending was kind of predictable to me, I don't know, but it was a good read that had a consistent story. Sometimes I had trouble figuring out who was speaking because there were no tags added on after whoever was speaking.
Your story got me hooked right in the beginning, I like the way protagonist was. It was very well done, and got me to observe and find a way to picture the protagonist. It was a very good suspense-type reading, and the fact that it was more sided on science fiction, made it a perfect match with the story.
I enjoyed the way your story started. I immediately was gravitated towards your main character. I kept finding myself wanting to know what would happen next. The way you chose to include science fiction into your story worked very well with the squid being able to turn into a little girl and back again. The only critique I have is that you continued to switch between tenses. But other than that I enjoyed your story.
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