Mi Familia-Amaris Ortiz

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Comments (1)

Christina Santana (Student 2019)
Christina Santana

Hi Amaris, I really liked your essay. I felt that your big understanding of family and how much value it has to you was a nice choice. I also liked how you expressed your viewpoint on it. As for your writing style, I think it is unique. It is kind of like you're able to make your writing seem casual without making it seem unprofessional. I think this allows the reader to feel like you're telling the story to them directly. With that being said, one of my favorite lines in your essay was "It was pure silence, but that silence meant everything." This was my favorite line because I could feel the intensity that you had intended to put into it, and that made the essay so much better. Overall, I think you did a great job!