I seriously enjoyed this, a lot. I really liked the setting, the way it was so non-futuristic and even tribal in some ways. It was a great flip on the science fiction that most people went for. The characters were interesting and well thought out, and I thought the ending was fantastic. Seriously, very very well done.
Gives me Mad Max/Sausage Party vibes. Sausage Party because of the religious themes. It read like a parable, which was really cool. I liked it. I'm having a heard time imagining an old lady socking the little girl in the cheek like that though. It's funny in my head.
I loved the twist at the end! It was very cool and the world you made was very full despite you having only twelve pages (if that makes any sense). The text brings up questions about religion and what happens when some concept many people believe in is debunked. I liked how they still worshipped it at the end. This kind of reminds me of when Pluto was classified as a dwarf planet, despite the story having nothing to do with that.
Lotus, I LOVED your story. I am not one for sci-fi, but your story really caught my attention. I think you did an amazing job at being very descriptive, you used a lot of sensory detail that really added to your writing. Your ending was really captivating and nicely tied together, and leaves me wondering what it was like with those who worshiped El Lloron versus those who didn't and how they would live amongst each other. Really nice job!!
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