Good job! My favorite part of this is the tension increasing to the big reveal. I thought the main character's stream of consciousness was very believable which made me feel empathetic. I thought the character's powers were believable but the whole different dimension thing was slightly confusing to me.
I've watched your story evolve and I have to say that it turned out really well. Your dynamic ideas and plot twist makes the story very entertaining. This worked really well although I wished you would have expanded a bit more on the whole another dimension thing. Other than that I loved it.
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