I really enjoyed the formatting of your story. I like how you kept the reader guessing at what you might write next. The story was written very well, however the readers might have a hard time understanding the message or theme. I think if you were to try and make it more clear in the beginning, middle, or end that would benefit your story.
I appreciate the anthological format and the throughline really shines through! The density of the first two makes for quick reading and memorable narrative, and they manage to balance well with the more slow, intentional feelings of the last two. On a personal note, I adore the premise of the "My Children" and respect the brevity.
I like how short the stories are yet they still convey the stories and lives many women live. I also like that there are no physical descriptions and instead, the story comes out of the experiences and the actions of the people around the women. This helps the reader learn about how society impacts women and how perception shapes your understanding of a story.
I loved this writing style and the idea of this story. It was very creative and very descriptive. I also thought it was very creative to divide up by character.
This is so good Dina! I love the format and perspective change throughout the piece. It's incredibly powerful and I can't wait to see where you go with it.
very cool way of delivering plot through very different styles of writing. it took me a minute to understand the story but once I did it was very well done. even during a short story a sense of confusion and isolation is built really well.
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