Your essay is really convincing. Your examples are actually good and support your thesis well and you explained that situation with Donald Trump which also shows a social problem in the government. I think that your essay was great.
This does convince me that there are societal issues within America, because we all have at least seen some of these happen and even experienced it. I liked your example of using the travel ban, because I think it really showed the strong messed-up beliefs that Donald Trump had, which relates to your thesis really nicely. I couldn't think of anything else, but you chose a great example. Other than that, I liked your essay a lot.
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