I really love the outsiders and your creative scene was great. You used all the elements you needed to use, and it was cool how close it seemed to the actual book. Good work.
You did a Magnificent Job on this project, you talked about all the elements thoroughly and then, you put it together really well, I like how you also made sure to explain some aspects of the book so people can understand it. Your design was also really nice.
GOOD JOB
I like how when describing the slang used in the book you connected it to how slang is used in Philadelphia and how she showed the comfortability in setting and made it more realistic. You also explained very well how the way they speak reflects a lot about the way they were groomed by their neighborhood and circumstances. Your fluidity in tone throughout your emulation was amazing. I read the book and with reading your piece I can see your attention to detail. The slang you used and the activities that the characters were doing helped give insight on the environment they are growing up and living in. The first person perspective is very helpful because with it focusing on one person your character might come across thoughts or ideas that the reader may have as well and you asked a lot of real world questions and you made it seem more of an account that a fictional story which shows skill. Your last element sensory was well written and made me feel.
Your project overall caught my attention throughout and I liked how your quote and text contrast in color for background and text helping me differ between each and with the quote having a bright color as a background it helped me pay attention to that first.
Your project has an interesting design that is easy to follow, and the color yellow makes it look friendly to the eye ( at least to me ). I think you did a great job implementing first person POV and brief and descriptive sentences in your creative scene. The slang element is what stands out the most and is used thoroughly throughout the text. Words like "drawlin'" and "real rap" made me feel emersed.
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