The cover art of this story is quite impressive as well as the flashbacks that add feeling and information surrounding the plot. As a highschooler this story is easy to relate to and I think that the descriptive dialogue gives more perspective into the characters life for the reader. In day 3 of the 4th part, you explain the situation in a way that makes the reader think about what it would be like waking up with your whole family and friends dead. The element of survival in this story carries through in different ways between the parts and ends in a heavy way.
this story made me laugh a little when they had gone back to primitive ways, to me that seemed funny. but when i got to the end that time jump through me because of how it just went from the "now" until 500 years in to the future and your only giving small date cuts. on of the techniques i liked is how you did the texting scene it made it feel like a real text. When they started bombing everything and then the virus cam out i really felt bad for the family because of we didn't get much on them after that point. the theme is really there about how plants could take over and if we don't treat the world right it will just fall on top of us. it was a really good story.
I really like the lineup of the story & how focused everyone was on their part. One technique that I noticed was flashbacks & backstory often here, as most of this stuff happened either in the past or future. I'm not reallys rue of the message however as it seems this story is just mainly about survival which is cool in my opinion
Honestly love how descriptive your dialogue scenes are. Usually dialogue scenes are not very descriptive but your were a different story (pun intended). From the sipping of the coffie, to Silas looking at his phone.
This story is really impressive, in my opinion it would sell for a lot of money, but I would really appreciate it if we saw more between Sid, Marcus, and Sasha. And it would be great to see a plot twist.
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