What I was impressed by:
- I'm impressed by the statistics presented it shows quite a lot of research.
- Small details and brought up controversies about planned parent hood.
- Thorough explanations.
Confused about:
- How were you getting the word out?
Areas for improvement:
- A few grammatical errors here and there
- The font style (italic, bold, etc) are almost the same throughout the site. A little differentiation would help the eyes.
- Talk a bit about how you petitioned and links to the petition site?
Nice Job! It's pretty convincing, for such a controversial topic. Although it's convincing to me, I'm not sure how others feel about this. There were a few biased parts I read, and I know it's a way of trying to get people to support, but try without that much of the bias and see how people would react by letting them make their own decision.
Impressed
- A good styled website.
- Has the political side of the planned parenthood down.
- She has evidence of how planned parenthood can be controversial.
- Situations where abortion could be acceptable are shown, but still shows controversy
Confused
- She explains planned parenthood, but how is she promoting her petition?
Improve
- Try promoting the site even more, add a link to your petition
I liked your project, it shows that you've taken the time to work on it and used your time effectively. Although I don't know much about this, I would give you these suggestions. Add why we should care about abortion, honestly, it is a controversial issue that sometimes goes unnoticed. Usually, this gets into religion and politics and a whole lot of talks about ethics that discourage readers. Try to real them in with understandable information, unbiased if you can. Let them form their own opinion on the matter. I think that would effectively help your project effectively. If people learned about the services Planned Parenthood provides, without labeling it an abortion center, things might settle for a while.
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