I really enjoyed the concept for this story! I see that there was inspiration from "Speech Sounds" By Octavia Butler, but you added your own unique twist on the concept, that being the ability to buy back senses from the market. I found this to be really engaging and fun to read! The switch between first and third person POV in the first part really added more insight to Dominic's character, as if you had just stuck with one POV. In the second part, I really enjoyed the use of figurative language and imagery throughout the story. It helped me become way more engaged in the story as a whole. The message about human behavior showed that people become greedy when there are limited resources available for them.
I like how you did the dialogue, especially in the second story, it really expressed and showed the emotions of the person talking. This story made me grateful of the senses I have and not to take them for granted and realize what people who don't go through. The message I got from reading this was that when humans are divided by what they have and don't have, they start being selfish to themselves.
I really like the concept of this story and it was well done. I feel like it was something different that I have never read before considering the theme. I think that it was a smart choice to make it based on a diary which made it unique and gave the reader a better understanding of it.
The idea of having your sense striped away and making a market off of getting them back is a really interesting idea and honestly sounds like something someone would make a movie out of.
I can clearly see that most of the story is not finished yet, but I really like where it is going & how everyone is being affected in different ways. A technique that i see multiple times in some of the sections is sensory descriptions which they love to use because the rebellious people have lost their senses. It didnt really give me any particular emotional feeling, but I felt that the message was life is not fortunate for everyone & that when time comes, you must pick a side to survive
I liked how a different font was used for dialogue in the first story, it made the story more engaging. This story made me more grateful for the senses I have and it made me feel sympathetic for the characters. This story taught me to not let the lack of something create selfishness.
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