Your Sci-Fi idea was amazing!
The story started off with the most realistic dialogue that I've read so far. It's funny because I actually got hungry after having read the earliest part. One question which I have in terms of characterization though is why was the mother still hesitant to help drive over to washington? I mean yeah there is someone running at 50 mph but its the mother who wouldn't care. I think this is very strong.
I think what you did well was building up the bond between the siblings in the story. The way you described your sci fi element was very fleshed out and made a lot of sense, and was also very interesting and fairly unprecedented. Usually genetic mutations are applied to entire species or a large group, but yours was specific to one family, which makes your story unique.
I think you came up with a really original idea. I liked how you clearly described the setting of your story, and how Via had once been to the White House and how that had helped her. I enjoyed the family connection that you made obvious. In terms of science fiction I think you did well. You did not have to create an entirely new world, yet it felt like a completely different world than ours. After reading this story I am thinking about genetically altered people. Another story I read also focused on this, so it draws attention to something that could actually happen.
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