Calm Among The Sworn Posted by Mohamed Bah in English 3 · Pahomov · B Band on Monday, June 5, 2017 at 10:35 pm click here Comments (6) Christopher Irwin-Diehl Interesting idea, extremely well written. Some minor issues with grammar (changing tense, mismatched plurality of verbs and nouns, etc), but other than that it's an excellent story. Jamal Hampton The way that would put the plot into way of science fiction was very unique. Each scene had very detailed and descriptive tive to go along with it. I also admire how well written your dialogue for the characters were. Luis-Manuel Morales The descriptive language used is probably the best out of the stories. Your characters are well rounded. Well done. Mekhi Friend I like that your story took a look on how it is to be immortal. I enjoyed reading it. It was creative and funny with a nice sci-fi aspect to it. Harrison Wellner This was a really interesting read, I enjoyed it. The concept of the immortal wanderer was interesting, and I liked the way you developed the characters in the short time that you had. It was especially interesting the way that you decided to shape the protagonist, and how he avoided finding out the answer to his condition. I thought this was altogether a good piece of writing. Eleanor Shamble I loved the library scene, especially the part where he didn't want a book and got one anyway. The sci-fi was very interesting and I think it worked well. I'm thinking about how much it would suck to be immortal Log in to post a comment.