uhhhhh this is actually amazing. Your dialogue is very natural and believable, and the way you progress the narrative does not seem forced or jumpy. There are no plot holes—this is so cohesive and seemingly meditated. You did a great job, stories like these are the result of reading and understanding the small mechanics of writing a good story
this story made me think of the philosophy that one can't have everything. This story did a really great job of showing this, and what happens when one tries.
I really liked your story! I loved how the plot thickened inside the family as the story went on and you stuck to one science-fiction theme the whole time.
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