McDoubled (Hours)

Posted by Messele Asfaw in English 2 · Pahomov · E Band on

          Give me a second please, it’s been a hard morning.
          Hmmm. Well, I guess I’ll have the McBurger with extra pickles. Uhh, yeah I want cheese. Extra large fries, and a super sized diet Mountain Dew. That’s all, thanks. *Slight pause* Do you have change for a 50? Thanks so much. Ahh, this will do. 10 minutes? I’ll be right back then, I need to use the bathroom. No, you did not need to know that.

*Washing hands motion*

*Sigh*,

About 50 minutes left. I guess I can just stay for an extra 10 minutes, after all he’s made me stay overtime a lot recently. You could say that I deserve it then. I missed a part of my daughter’s graduation because of it too. And my wife’s anniversary. Yeah, I don’t think he’s ever treated me fairly at all. Thinking back on it, my wife’s being a struggle too. I need to say something to her. And I also need to say something to my boss. It’s time to stop acting like a pushover. I can’t keep letting him treat me like this.

*Walks out of bathroom and into seat.”

I will tell him. I will give him a piece of my mind. I will do it. Eventually. But what about my job? Should I just talk to H.R. about it? Well, Mr. Bossman is her boss too… No, I will do it, and even if I get fired, I’ll get my creepy uncle to hook me up with a pharmaceutical job. In the case he doesn’t fire me, I guess he won’t see me as a bitch anymore. *3 second pause*

Order number 79? Hey, that’s me.

*Walk over to stand and collects consumables.*

This feels a bit lighter than I expected. Huh. No pickles? No cheese? NO PICKLES?! NO CHEESE?! Where is the manager? I want to speak to your manager. Where’s my drink? Don’t tell me you forgot my drink! How am I supposed to eat this pizza without my drink?! This service is sickening! I am sick and tired. I am sick and tired of being treated like trash, like I’m some shitty burger found in the back of a McDonald’s, no offense. I demand to speak to the manager. You are the manager? Then manage things! I waited a whole twenty minutes for my food, and you only bring ⅓ of it. That ⅓ wasn’t even complete? Is everybody deaf, can they hear me? Do I have to scream? REEEEEEE!  You know what? I don’t need this right now. I deserve better. I deserve a refund at least. Yeah, I want a refund, at this instance! Yeah, you take those bills out. I’ll be taking that.

*Walks out of store*

Now it’s time to go talk to Mr. Bossmanson.

*Walks signifying leaving establishment*
Ummm.. Mr. Bossdudeguy, I-I-I think we need to have a little t-talk. No I don’t want to do more overtime. It’s about the way you’ve been treating me. *Pause* As in matter of fact, I do have something to say about it. I want a raise. I want a change of hours. I need a little respect. That was all I ever wanted. No, that was all I ever needed. I want all of that or I quit! *Pause* Yes, I have the statistics for the quarterly revenue stream. It is on your desk, I finished it a few days ago. *Pause* What’s that? I’m fired? *Distressed voice*

Chill, it’s just a prank bro, I was only kidding. I was quitting from the beginning. Yeah, that’s it! Catch you on the flip side!

Comments (11)

Sarah Berg (Student 2019)
Sarah Berg

I like how you took the situation of someone wanting to quit their job / be respected and inserted some funny situations in the middle. I thought the character was quite unique.

Paxton Wentzell (Student 2019)
Paxton Wentzell

Nice? It's okay. You have a clear character that comes alive with dialogue, but I don't really see much growth, which is important in something like this. No, that's not what I mean. I don't see… a steady growth of the character. It seems kind of binary, like at one point this character's one way and then the next paragraph he's totally different. It definitely seems rushed. Also, the one thing about this monologue that really bugs me is. "How am I supposed to eat this pizza without my drink?!" doesn't really work because he ordered a McBurger. Why would you put cheese and pickles on the pizza??? I don't understand?!?!?!

Rebecca Snyder (Student 2019)
Rebecca Snyder

I find that this monologue really brings the character to life through the comedic aspect as well as the way he interacts with the other people he's talking to. It brings us through multiple parts in this short period of time by showing us his change of emotion and feeling.

Aysha Siddiquee (Student 2019)
Aysha Siddiquee

There are many aspects to relate to such as the stress and the humor. This brings the character to life since there are parts in the monologue that we as humans experience as a part of our daily life.

Marcin Czapla (Student 2019)
Marcin Czapla

The reaction was very humanlike if that's even a word. I feel like you could definitely see an interaction like this in everyday life at like a McDonald's or something. He also has an interaction with his boss at the end which further makes this sound like someone is speaking and not like an essay.

Bea Gerber (Student 2019)
Bea Gerber

This is really great. I think that you took a serious situation and made it funny while still keeping the emotions and the urgency in it. I understand the type of person the main character is, and I can feel his confidence grow as the story goes on. This was very funny and really great to read. Good job!

Jason Chen (Student 2019)
Jason Chen

This is funny, it has an odd mix of things. But you brought this character to life by standing up and doing something that character couldn't do in the first place. And in the end, you just shook it off like it was some prank and didn't care. I could see the change throughout the monologue

Amado Alfaro-Allah (Student 2019)
Amado Alfaro-Allah

This really brings the character to life by making him seem human and have flaws that a person in general would have. Also it brought it to life by just using good character development and taking the steps of sticking up for himself