MeMagazine Slide Version 2 - Colin Taylor-McGrane

Tech Slide (1)

When I presented my slide, I learned that you need to have empty space in the right places. I had put empty space above my picture, which I thought looked OK, however it really served no purpose and it didn’t look good. I also learned that you should never have red text on a blue background, because it vibrates your eyes in bad ways. I learned that just because the slide is about me, I don’t need to feature my name. For the edited version of my slide, I got rid of my name completely. I made the picture bigger, so it got rid of the dead space above it. I moved my text box to the left, so there would be more space between the picture and the text. I made the text bigger, and moved it up, so there was empty space above and below the picture. I hope these changes make my slide more visually appealing.

Slide Revision Ariana Flores

Design Slide Ariana Flores

​From my critiques, I got the impression that contrast didn't always have to be included on a slide. There were mixed feelings on whether I should include contrast and stray from my color scheme. I tried to add red and different colored paint splatters to blend in with the black and white on the second and third-third of my slide. However, it didn't seem cohesive. From there, I wanted to keep the font (Rock Salt) and size (64) because it was said that the tension between the "A" and the treble clef was apparent and worked well.

I didn't want to change the black lettering to one specific color, because the color seemed too vibrant against the backdrop. Then I tried typing the same text in a separate text box and stacking it over the black. From there I changed the color of the text on top to create a black shadow behind it. I applied colors such as white, red, turquoise, navy blue, etc. Although the color shadow added dimension, it didn't hurt or improve the slide. I ended up just keeping the letters plain black. I also spaced the letters “r” and “e” in “Flores” so that they weren’t confusing to the eye. It may seem a bit spaced out, but I wanted to make sure that it was easy to read without having to change the font.

Me Side #2- Sharron Norton

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​I learned from the critique of my slide that my idea was very good and my application was amazing. From my classmates, i found a few mistakes i could change, but other than that everything else was fine. I made the changes to my side because first the critique i was given was in a helpful way and didn't offend me (hurt my feelings) in any way. And also i knew that it would help me out 

My Revised Slide: Jack Sugrue

I realized that the background of my photo made the slide generally too cluttered as well as the monochrome was a good theme to stick with. With this knowledge, I changed my background of my photo to fit with the blue background of the slide. I made everything blue, which, in my opinion, made everything less of an eyesore. Through my critiques, I helped make the words more legible, my name more centered for where it was, and made the background less prominent.


 JZ: Hola, Bae. ¿Quieres ir al cine conmigo luego?

Beyoncé: Lo siento. Tengo que bailar. 

Donald Trump: ktal, Hill? ¿Tienes ganas de ir a Iowa conmigo?

Hillary: Uf, no gracias. Yo soy enfermo.


Willow: kpasa, hermano. ¿Tienes ganas de ir al concierto de Missy Elliot conmigo?

Jaden:Ay dios mio, si!


MacBeth: ktal? ¿Tienes ganas de cenar (have dinner) conmigo?

Lady MacBeth: Lo siento. Tengo que trabajar.


Giorgio: ¿Quieres ir a Arch Gourmet conmigo?

Manuel: Claro que si!


Gerwer:?Tienes ganas de al cine?

Lehmann: No, gracias. Estoy ocupado.


Dora: ¿Quieres explorar a Perú en agosto?



SpongeBob: ¿Tienes ganas de ir a una discoteca conmigo?



Miley Cyrus: ¿Tienes ganas de escribir canciones (songs) conmigo?




Me Slide #2

I learned a few things from my critique. One thing I learned is that I had incorrect spacing in between my photos. Another thing I learned is a couple of rules about signs and billboards. I learned the rule of thirds where a billboard can be divided into 3 areas. I also learned about the sizing of my name. People said it was a little too small so I made my name bigger. Another critique I got was about my background. So I took away my previous background and replaced it with a background that sort of matched the colors of the photos. I also changed the soccer ball so the color could match the background. All in all, I am happier with my new and improved slide. 

My Slide #2

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During my slide's critique, I learned that I did pretty well. I only needed a few small edits and I did my best to take them all into account. The things I was told need to be edited was all just placement so it was really easy to fix. I was told to move the words "Stay Alive" up to the tops so it touched the edge. I also made the clefs a bit bigger so they took up more space.

My Slide - Myah Mccoy

I learned a lot from my critque from my class. They all gave me a lot of helpful advice. I thought about the rule of thirds, color choosing, and using the space properly. I mad my name larger and and centered in under "BE YOURSELF". Since the classroom told me that my name was way too smal and I agree. Then I made "BE YOUSELF bigger also. Then I used the rules of thirds on my picture. Before I had five pictures on my slide. I decied to delete two of them because the slide was too crowed and instead of angling them, I just placed them in a line. 

My Revised Slide - David Roberts

Me Slide
I change a good bit of things on my slide. I removed my name because that took op too much room in the slide. I removed my fake images and found real ones on google. I made sure that the color of the word and the picture still matched. I used the rule of thirds to place my picture in their own third of the slide. I cornered the words "Science" and "Athletic" and made sure the spacing was symmetric. I centered the word "Technology". I put the words on top of the pictures that they corresponded with. I made my slide simple and to the point. My last slide was cramped with my name and the words and now I have changed that. 

Leo's Revised Slide and Reflection

I learned how to keep a slide very basic from the critique I was given. My slide had too many components and was really four slides put into one. On this one I kept it very basic. There is one clear image on this slide instead of four. I also tried to use more information from our research with the baseball cropped of at the top and bottom. The Phillies symbol on either side takes care of much of the empty space, but I still left some above each sign. I was advised to leave my name in all capitals so I did and finally my background was a little complex and had some odd patterns so I made it a white background, because black (the background for the baseball) an white go together well.

Me Slide #2 - Carolina Ortiz

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From my slide critique I learned that my slide was pretty nice and organized. The only thing that I was told that I should change was the placement of my words. In response to my critique I rearranged my words so that they weren't so close to the pictures I have on my slide. This way everything doesn't look as crammed and the audience has a better opportunity to really see and understand my slide. 

My Revised Slide: Christina Santana

The comments I took away from the critiques of my slide were taking away my name from the slide, making the text bigger, and making the lines of my collage black instead of white. I learned that these things made my slide look very busy, which could be a turned off to the person viewing it. This caused the main idea for me when I was changing my slide to be simplicity. When taking these changes into account I not only changed the color of the lines of my collage, but I also made the lines wider so the pictures would be more spread out. This made my slide look like it hard more space, and it made it easier on the eye. I also made the font of my quote significantly larger so it would be a key point for the viewer to look at. This is what I took into account to make my slide resemble the slides shown in Presentation Zen.
Tech Slide- Christina Santana (7)

Revised Slide

Slide for tech (2)
The critique gave me a lot to think about for my slide. First, people said the color in the Philly symbol was a bit out of place. I wanted to keep the color but make it pop less. Therefore, I used the tools in recolor to make it darker in order to blend in more. I feel that this made it go better with the slide. I also recolored my name to make the Philly symbol match better. I made my name a very dark blue which matched the symbol. Another critique was that the images should be closer in size. The first thing I decided to do in order to combat this was enlarge the shoes and make them bleed. This gave me more room for the other images and included another element of design. I also feel that it made the slide more visually interesting. By doing this I had more room to enlarge the other shapes, and I did so. I also enlarged my name a bit so that more attention was drawn towards it. 

My Single Slide Revised

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When I was critiqued I realized a number of things. For starters, my name was barely visible. My slide was also pretty dark so it wouldn't be as likely to catch someone's eye. When I changed my slide I wanted it to be simpler. In my previous slide there was shattered glass in the background which gave you something to think about but it was also a bit distracting. I re-did my entire slide and made it simpler, eye catching and I gave a clear message to my audience that would be easily understood. I wanted my theme of my slide to be black and white because simple colors like that are easy for people to look at and they will quickly draw the person's attention. The background of my slide represents my city. I grew up in center city for the majority of my life and then about two years I moved to South Philly. My name is in bold and capital letters and it isn't hard to read. My name is big and bright too. The two dates in the upper left hand corner have significance too. August 20 and 21 are the dates my parents signed the divorce papers. The announcement of their split three years ago had a huge impact on me and has helped me becomes the person that I am today and has taught me so many things that I wouldn't have learned. The dates are smaller and less eye catching because I wanted my name to be the first thing the person sees and then the two dates would give them something to think about afterwards. 

Who I Am? Pt.2 - Nzinga Suluki - Bey

Tech project 2
When being criteria I decide to change some of my pictures and enlarge all my pictures. I also decided to change the background to a different blue. I also made my slide background blue. I like this slide better because my pictures work better and I understand it more than when I first made my slide. The flow of the color background blends in with the words. Also people will understand the quote threw the pictures. Hope you like my new slide!

My slide Shamus Keough (re-done)

tech slide 2.0 (3)
Most of the people that recommended things that I should change said that they liked my design, but said I should change the sizes for some of the pictures I had. People were saying that I should have a little less blank space, so I made the car a little bigger and did the same with the cancer symbol and "Moose Man" logo. Besides that, I kept the slide mostly the same.

Kristian's Slide and Script


Kristian Ramos

I went for a more simple slide with a complex meaning. I only chose one image because I wanted the words to have more meaning. I chose this image because I felt that it accurately showed what training for some people might look like. I made the words sort of fade with the font. I made it this way so that the word would sort of linger in your mind just as they do on the slide. I wanted people to remember what I had written. When I was deciding I really wanted more emphasis to be put on the words rather than attention drawn to a picture. I understand that images definitely pop more but I just felt that the statements I had written were more important than what an image could display.

Slide 2 Brendan Hall

Tech 2nd slide
I learned from my critiques to have less images in my slide and keep it simple. These changes made my slide have more focus and easier to look at.  I decided to change my whole slide because I thought it would be too confusing and created this new slide. On this slide I wanted to make a slide of a colorful sky that represents happiness but I edited the original photo and made a darker feel to represent negativitity. I did this to show that there will always positives and negatives in our world but you can still enjoy life which is why I put the quote of What a time to be alive in there.  

Reflection Blog #1

Times: 1-3:30 (2.5 hours) 1-4:30 (3.5 hours) = 6 hours

My ILP is going very well. I am a film intern with Judith Redding, an independent film maker in Philadelphia. This month I worked mostly on editing my first video. In October I shot lots of footage with a Canon Vixia Judith lent me and started to choose my clips for the video. Then this past month of November I worked with those clips to arrange and cut them down. I had maybe 4 hours of footage and from that had a 2:45 video. Then in November after I arranged my clips and edited them it ended up to be about 1:30. My video currently is silent, but Judith showed me audio and song sites and gave me resources on Creative Commons and how to legally use sound clips. My video is due at the end of the year, so I hope to finish editing the clips and perhaps add some music to my video or audio. I am excited for my next project, and hope to get a better editing software for my videos, also!

Me Magazine Slide, Lucien Hearn

Me Magazine silde

When I started making this project,  I thought that I would go with a cinematic approach, but soon realized that as I continued making the project, I kept moving farther away from this, finally ending up with a product semblant of a flag. In the picture of the woman, it's bleeding on both the upper and right sides. I changed the opacity of each statement as to show the viewer what was more important to focus on. I’m happy with how this turned out because it looks good design-wise.